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What is this
on the next horizon
holding strong against the wind,
it is a figment,
it is an oil stain,
it is something
less than a blur
and more than a photograph.
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Just a little, quiet poem.
Comments welcome as always.
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~Sigma-Echo-Seven Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Concise and meaningful. Well done.
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Mood: Wow! ~willyamPax Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
VERY CLEVER BRAVO!
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*FallingAsleepTonight Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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~So-lovelyxxx Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm, I like it's simplicity.
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*FallingAsleepTonight Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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*Shadowdragon700 Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful picture you painted. i can really see it
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*FallingAsleepTonight Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome, thanks
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Mood: Joy ~cskadoz Sep 6, 2012   General Artist
:happybounce: nice! :boogie: may i suggest omitting "it is" in 3,4 & 5? think it might read better.
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*FallingAsleepTonight Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'll think about it :)
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~BelaRoseWolf Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
This is a really cute poem! :) I like the theme, and the words are really nice. Great work!
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