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What is this
on the next horizon
holding strong against the wind,
it is a figment,
it is an oil stain,
it is something
less than a blur
and more than a photograph.
Just a little, quiet poem.
Comments welcome as always.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
Concise and meaningful. Well done.
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willyamPax Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
VERY CLEVER BRAVO!
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012   Writer
Thanks!
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xgalaxies Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm, I like it's simplicity.
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Thanks :)
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Shadowdragon700 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful picture you painted. i can really see it
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Awesome, thanks
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   General Artist
:happybounce: nice! :boogie: may i suggest omitting "it is" in 3,4 & 5? think it might read better.
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
I'll think about it :)
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
This is a really cute poem! :) I like the theme, and the words are really nice. Great work!
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Thanks!
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! :)
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starell Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Ooh very lovely. I love how your poem mirrors what it's talking about because it's just a little wisp of a thing that still gives you the chills
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconstarell:
starell Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
welcome! :)
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Android3000 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist
Nice
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Thanks, love your icon
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visionsofthor Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! Short and simple, but perfect. :worship:
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Great to hear :)
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remanth Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is awesome, I really like it
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Thank you!
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XOnTheCalender Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
"It is something
"less than a blur
"And more than a photograph."
For some reason, this last bit is just beautifully perfect. This whole poem is just beautifully perfect. Good work here :)
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Writer
Thanks a bunch, I built the poem off those lines actually :)
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XOnTheCalender Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
You're welcome, and you did a great job of it :D
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